THIS IS MY FIRST DESCRIPTIVE PARAGRAH, PLEASE TELL ME ANY SUGGESTIONS YOU HAVE OR JUST COMMENTS. THANKS AND KEEP ROCKING THE FREE WORLD
Lauren Poblete
Jana Peter
Humanities
8 February 2007
Descriptive Writing
I look at the thing that Mildred lives in. Why doesn’t she realize I’m here and that that it isn’t real life. I pick up the book and read from it. There is nothing, but people like Mildred wouldn’t know that because she lives like she is suppose to live. Clarisse would know. Clarisse would know right away, she would never read this. I read more and the more I read the more frustrated I get. I wish that it was these books we burned not the ones filled with limitless knowlodge. I know that if I try to explain to Mildred that the book is really about nothing she won’t understand.
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Lauren,
I REALLY like this piece. I think that you use a lot of good description that really shows a lot of emotion. Nice job!
My one sugestion would be to make it more clear who is speeking.
Kit
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